Poetic Metacognition, Vol. 3
Here is our final poet who responded to their original work:
Cats
Cats pounce about,
So nice and keen,
But when they see a single bug,
There eyes get a vicious gleam.
They wiggle their little behinds,
And crouch down to spring,
But nothing they do can reach the flying bugs,Yes, not a thing.
So they jump,
And leap,
And say in their little kitty speak:
“Get that bug! It’s right over the jug!
The one with the water!”
But the cats try, all they can,
Until one of their daughters says:
“Listen now, we could reach it,
If we can use teamwork and persistence,
Then we’ll teach it!”
And then erupts a mighty cat cheer!
While the bug,
Trembles in fear.
They jump, and bounce,
one tries a little kitty pounce,
But nothing reaches the small bug.
They form a cat ladder, and make quite the clatter,
Bringing in the little kids trampoline.
They pounce, then bounce,
And reach the bug!
The cats give off a cheer,
Their persistence and teamwork paid off,
So remember,
Next time you see a moth,
You can always get a friend to help you.
And the response:
4/2/19
Cats By Xander
Cats is my poem about a clatter of cats on a quest to kill a small bug that’s on the ceiling, so doing something ridiculously stupid because a small fly is on the ceiling and cats don’t have wings, so yey, purrfect oppurrtunity (heh, heh, purring jokes) anyway, in this response I will tell you three different things in my poem, tell you how I meant for them to be and how they are through the creator’s eyes.
- in the first few lines, before flying bugs are mentioned, I talk about how the cats jump about and wiggle their behinds when they are about to pounce, I put that there because when I notice my cats about to pounce, they crouch down and wiggle their lower bodies, but when I write it out it gets much, much sillier than I intend it to be. Imagine this: The cat coils up to spring, in a flash! It unleashes itself and pounces on its prey. Versus this: the cute kitty crouches down and wiggles his behind he pounces with an adorable mew and lands on the wood floor. If you read that last part in an l = w voice then you can see the difference.
- In line 18, I say that the cats all cheer to an idea, I meant for this to be exciting and all like “Yay! We can get rid of the pesky bug!” and usually you would think of it as sounding like”hooray!” or “Yayyyy!” or even”Yaaaa!” and that seems like a normal cheer, but this is a cat cheer, so if you think to much about it it turns from a normal cheer, which is what I intended, to “Mroowwww!” or “Mewwwww!” or even “Merrowwwww!” seriously, I thought WAY too much into this, a little to much even.
- In lines 24 through 32, they use the child’s trampoline , yes, the kids trampoline just to make a little bug dead, this part was supposed to be a tad bit silly but I think that it got too silly, the cats drag in the trampoline and bounce on it to reach the bug and kill it. Hey guys, overkill much? Infact, I said that they made a clatter getting it in the kitchin, in my mind the family was away somewhere, but I never said they weren’t home in the poem. Imagine that: your in bed reading your book, and you hear crashes and the sound of something being pulled across the floor! “Oh, is fine, nutins goin on down there.” but no! The cats are back at it again! Really now, it got much sillier than intended.
So there you have it! 3 things in my poem Cats that I did not intend to be like that but whatever, how the cats are described, how the cats cheer but when you think about it you realise they are just meowing, and the cats dragging in the trampoline, I actually made this poem myself and really like it, because cats, I also have a few more that I typed up and printed out, I would like to recommend this poem to anyone who likes cats and funny poems.
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